Tuesday, October 02, 2007

A Fragile Overnight Sensation

Every breath she takes is a small act of desperation. Out of the corner of her eye, she sees him; he sits at the last table by the wall. Her food before her, she moves peas over here, shifts the grey, flavorless meat over there. She does not intend to eat this. She is the quiet one in accounting. She is aware of the cliché, “the quiet one in accounting”, but in this case, it is reasonable. He shovels his food in as if the only thing left is the chair and the executioner. This display of wanton hunger amuses her, and beyond that, she is utterly enamored of him.

Without her affection, he would be entirely alone. He is a remarkable sight, easily topping three hundred and fifty pounds and a hair less than five feet, he is both small and enormous at the same time. In her eyes, he is an apparition of glorious perfection. It is as if only she can see him at all. The rest of them, the lathe operators, foremen, sweepers, the lot of them, make great efforts to ignore him. He does his job (barely), and that is enough, no need to actually deal with him.

As for her, her anonymity is total. She works in pad number six, on the stamp press machine with the cracked bit. There is a running pool among the foremen as to when the bit will finally shatter. They all agree that when that day comes, they will blame it on her and use it as an excuse to let her go. But for now, she cranks out her 175 pieces a day, like clockwork, and no one pays her any mind.

She still drives the car her grandmother left her, the 85 Crown Victoria. It’s a tank, and she is almost completely obscured by the dashboard when she drives. Tonight, she will follow him home.

She waits just outside of the gates for him. Her radio is permanently locked on the AM gospel channel. She smokes generics and watches the gate for his Suzuki Samurai. Some woman on the radio is giving it all up for Jesus.

Out comes the Samurai. She lets a couple more cars pass, and then pulls in line. She keeps her distance. The radio implores her to go with Jesus, and to let the Lord’s love shine.

He pulls into a small, modest neighborhood not too far from hers. They drive past several small ranch style houses and then he finally pulls into the drive of a single story brick house in a horrible state of disrepair. Throwing caution aside, she pulls in behind him.

He opens the door, labors out of the tiny car (which rises several inches), and then turns, clearly apprehensive, and looks at her. She opens her door, and steps out. For what seems to her to be an eternity, they stand stock still, looking at one another. Neither of them moves. Finally, he turns and heads to the door.

She follows.

He unlocks the door and leads her into his home. The house is mess. Things are in utter disarray. There is no furniture in the living room, only piles of magazines, newspapers, and garbage.

He walks through the house, around the mountains of trash, covering his well-laid path of filth in the carpet. She is breathing heavily, trying hard not to appear too apprehensive. She begins to notice that she is somewhat excited, this experience so foreign, so vague. Sweat begins to form on her brow. They enter his bedroom. There are black sheets over the windows; no light gets in at all. In fact, the entire room is sheathed in varying shades of darkness. Without the small lamp on the floor beside his bed, it would be like the interior of some sort of subterranean cave.

He sits down on the edge of the bed and looks up at her. There is no emotion on his face. She is shaking. He removes his boots, and then removes his work suit. Beneath his suit he wears an under shirt and a pair of boxers. He leans back on the bed and looks at her. She removes her white work smock and drops it on the floor. She strips down to her threadbare underwear. She walks to the edge of the bed. He watches her. Neither of them makes a sound.

He then raises his arm towards her, beckoning. She slips down on to the bed and into his arms. They embrace. The sharpness of his sweat, the softness of his abundant flesh, all of this captures her, leaves her awash in warmth. He reaches over and picks up a remote. He turns on his stereo and plays the radio.

They lay in each other’s arms, silently, and both look up at the hole in the ceiling. All the while, the radio plays Billy Thorpe’s Children of the Sun.

16 Comments:

Blogger Carlos Anaconda said...

At first i thought, from teh title and the first sentence, that you were going to write about britney spears. hehe. now i'm wondering if this is related to the another piece of fiction you did a while back about the guy with the two houses one that looked a bit like this one (though i dont remember all the garbage, but vaguely remember something like black sheets over the windows), the other house was a garden. Is this the same guy? is the reason they seem like they are the same guy that they both seem quiet, brooding even, a little like some kind of cramer alter ego?

if they are the same guy, i would like to see a link at the bottom that connects both stories. I would like to see that anyways, cause right now i'd like to read the other story, but i dont feel like digging through the ton of posts to find it.

nice job. i was again intrigued by the set up.

October 2, 2007 9:18:00 AM EDT  
Blogger John Cramer said...

Thanks C. They're not deliberately meant to be the same guy, but you're right in that they probably share elements of how I roll. The first guy would be a sharp dresser, and almost an ethereal presence, invisible more out a sort of almost sophisticated effort of will. The guy in this story, almost grotesquely overweight, sloppy, somewhat clumsy, looks very different in my mind. But maybe they have a connection?

Here's the link betwixt the twain: http://www.nonalignmentpact.com/2007/04/garden-and-ocean_17.html

Here's part 2 (it's at the bottom, scroll down, or relive the glory of another of my rants): http://www.nonalignmentpact.com/2007/05/while-my-guitar-paroxysmically.html

October 2, 2007 9:32:00 AM EDT  
Blogger Carlos Anaconda said...

ok, thanks. upon re-reading the first story, i now see the difference in the situations the characters are in as being more different than i remembered it, but still i get the feeling the two guys are close in character, just in different circumstances (maybe separated by years of untold events). I think part of this has to do with how you write about them with a certain detached distance yet not without affection. Almost as if you know there is something in these characters that attracts you, yet you are hesitant to look into what it is (or maybe hesitant to tell us what it is). A series of 5 or 6 stories like this could make a really interesting 'man with no name' group (even though i do realize that this story seems on the surface to be more about the woman).

October 2, 2007 9:45:00 AM EDT  
Blogger John Cramer said...

Thanks, there may be more to come. Great feedback, and great ideas. I hadn't thought of there being hesitancy, but you may be somewhat right for both reasons.

October 2, 2007 9:53:00 AM EDT  
Blogger The Sparrows of Happiness said...

The Billy Thorpe reference is right on.

Do you know... he died this year, a heart attack. What a drag. I loved that song when I was a kid.

October 2, 2007 10:00:00 AM EDT  
Blogger The Sparrows of Happiness said...

By the way, for some reason when I read this, it made me think of times that I toured the Blue Bell plant in Brenham. In the ice cream room/gift shop there are all these bouncy 20ish hotties slapping Mint Chocolate Chip in bowls for you, which is pretty righteous. But the *real* plant employees appear from time to time, in the break room or out on a bench smoking cigarettes, and it always gets me thinking for some reason.

I liked this short a lot, because it has that same effect of a brief window opening up into someone else's life, kind of like what I felt at the Blue Bell plant or late at night when you see some office building window lit up and you wonder what poor slob is up there, knocking out a report for his a-hole boss, and what his kids are like and what his wife looks like, and what he's thinking about.

October 2, 2007 10:11:00 AM EDT  
Blogger Kilian said...

That's really interesting that Carlos made a connection between the two stories. I thought about the other one but did not see as much connection at first myself.

I did wonder if she was inspired by Ramon's last post, because I couldn't help but imagine more about his co-worker character.

You build these characters to be fairly pathetic people. I'm not at all sure what we're supposed to get out of it. As the female character thinks this experience so foreign, so vague.

Still, I look forward to more.

October 2, 2007 11:20:00 AM EDT  
Blogger baleen said...

I like that there is no dialogue. The reader can't help but imagine what they would say to each other yet that is only implied by the reader's imagination and still not inherent to the the text. Impersonal yet personalized at the same time. (forgive the binary).

October 2, 2007 11:54:00 AM EDT  
Blogger bluebird of doom and gloom said...

pointless comments section hijack blip: i saw george clooney again this morning. he's filming burn after reading here in the neighborhood.

October 2, 2007 11:59:00 AM EDT  
Blogger Head Stapler said...

That was great. It did remind me of the "beautiful stories for ugly children" series. And I choked when I read Suzuki Samurai! I totally imagined it animated and not real life. Like the Triplets of Belleview... or whatever the name is. Do keep the shorts coming.

October 2, 2007 1:18:00 PM EDT  
Blogger John Cramer said...

K, I don't care too much what you get out of it. Furthermore, I don't think they're pathetic at all. I'm sorry you read it that way, but it's not important. They find each other. Pathetic is everyone else to me. Hell, we're all a little pathetic, no?

October 2, 2007 8:17:00 PM EDT  
Blogger Kilian said...

You're absolutely right John.

October 2, 2007 8:33:00 PM EDT  
Blogger Head Stapler said...

"Everyone else", John?

Where's the Pathetic list? Is everyone really on it, or just the people you know.. because I know some people too. I'll even put myself on there first so no one thinks I'm uppity.

October 2, 2007 9:34:00 PM EDT  
Blogger John Cramer said...

Everyone else in the story, was what I meant, HS. The last bit was just ugly.

October 3, 2007 2:44:00 AM EDT  
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October 3, 2007 7:21:00 AM EDT  
Blogger John Cramer said...

Sorry, I only read the Nascar romance series.

October 3, 2007 9:21:00 AM EDT  

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